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Merlin - IDK my BFF Gwen?

Don't Say a Word

Posted by shotaphile on 2006.05.31 at 17:26


allfireburns at 2006-09-15 06:02 (UTC) (Link)
I really liked this - Mark and Gordon are actually really cute together, and I love the way you've written them. There was some odd sentence structure in places that made me stop and blink at it, and some jarring POV switches, and there was this one thing I would like to point out:

but Mark was anything if not “dedicated” to his camera
...I think you mean nothing if not dedicated to his camera.

Other than that, though? Very nice story. I think I liked the ending the best, the part about things feeling right to Mark, the effects they had on each other. It was pretty and sweet and made me go aww.
shotaphile at 2007-06-14 20:58 (UTC) (Link)
Ah! Thank you for that, I knew when I wrote that bit out that something didn't seem write but, for some reason, at the time, I couldn't figure out why.
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